what do you mean it's not awesome

Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 16 part 2

szaleniec1000 Jun 21, 2011 03:40

The ball approaches. More like the load of balls.

( Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 16, continued (NSFW) )

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Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 16 part 1

szaleniec1000 Jun 20, 2011 03:10

The fail is coming thick and fast, so I'm going to carry on with the two-parters just to keep the updates a manageable size.

( Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 16 (NSFW) )

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Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 15 part 2

szaleniec1000 Jun 16, 2011 03:17

It continues.

( Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 15 (NSFW) )

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Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 12

szaleniec1000 May 30, 2011 20:47

Chapter 12 is entitled "Revelations", and I wish this just meant it was full of even more infodumping. Even that would be better than this.

( Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 12 (NSFW, NSF anything) )

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Now that's what I call a dramatic reading.

szaleniec1000 Jan 23, 2011 15:33

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Deserving Chapter 45

szaleniec1000 Jan 18, 2011 02:34

On with the story.

( Deserving Chapter 45 (NSFW) )

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Deserving Chapters 42-43

szaleniec1000 Jan 13, 2011 22:26

Welcome back to Deserving. Chapters 42 and 43 follow directly on from each other, so here they are as a double bill.

( Deserving Chapters 42-43 (NSFW) )

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Deserving Retrospective and Chapter 40

szaleniec1000 Jan 10, 2011 14:34

As this is the fortieth chapter (yay?) let's take a look at the highlights (lowlights?) so far.

( long list, some NSFW descriptions )

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Deserving Chapter 38

szaleniec1000 Jan 02, 2011 22:21

I intended Chapters 38 and 39 to be a single update, but they're both so teeming with fail that it was getting too long. So 39 to follow shortly.
( Deserving Chapter 38 )

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Deserving Chapter 37

szaleniec1000 Dec 29, 2010 19:42

It's been a while since Deserving has actually given us a sex scene, and believe me Chapter 37 more than makes up for lost time.
( So it's NSFW. )

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